“… what if she wrote more from a personal place …?”

Not from the first person perspective. A self so absorbed – so narrow focused – so stuck in the muddle of feelings, thoughts, self negation. Why not write from a present awareness of self – “breathing in, I am aware of my in breath: breathing out, I am aware of my out breath.

Would she then awaken an observer through the flow of ink – ink creating negative spaces introducing a new awareness of self?